Digital artwork WIP ( NEED ADVICE!!)

[Shinsen]

Hey guys, first time I ask advice on a forum ever, my previous pieces lacked originality so I went ahead and pull something decent out of my mind for once, I present to you " Unholy Game ":

Edit: http://fc05.deviantart.com/fs46/f/2009/174/7/c/__Unholy_Game_by_Shinsen.jpg

http://i44.tinypic.com/1znlemg.jpg



Here is the pretty much finished concept art. Its a young girl that will look pretty evil, putting a soul with her bare hands in a jar full of tormented souls. Around there are trees, and those spheres on the ground are skulls, and there are candles too.

Tell me what you think, I need advices before starting to paint it!:D

[MurdokX]

solid composition, perhaps add a few more layers of background trees? I dont sense a great distance, it could add more drama

[Shinsen]

solid composition, perhaps add a few more layers of background trees? I dont sense a great distance, it could add more drama

Thanks, and yes i was planning on adding some more details in the background with colors, im not sure what to do in the background yet , only trees or a sky or something, still neeed advice !

[Shinsen]

do people ever post here :/

[dwinbotp]

Hello Shinsen, Yes, people do post and usually replies to most stuff, sharing thoughts and giving advice etc. You have to be patient though, It was just a few days after DW4's deadline and I sincerely believe those who finished their entries are freaking tired from it. :)

As for your piece, like Murdokk said, it's looking good already, I would also move the right tree away from the bird and the stand it's perching on just to separate the two, although it would also depend on how you're planning to render it afterwards. Colors can do the trick, bring out what's on the foreground and pushing the background back too. keep it up:)

[Shinsen]

Hello Shinsen, Yes, people do post and usually replies to most stuff, sharing thoughts and giving advice etc. You have to be patient though, It was just a few days after DW4's deadline and I sincerely believe those who finished their entries are freaking tired from it. :)

As for your piece, like Murdokk said, it's looking good already, I would also move the right tree away from the bird and the stand it's perching on just to separate the two, although it would also depend on how you're planning to render it afterwards. Colors can do the trick, bring out what's on the foreground and pushing the background back too. keep it up:)

Thats true, didnt realize that. :P
And thanks for the feedback, Ive fixed it already, I might start colouring now.

[Ksan]

Your composition is cool! I like the idea a lot, and I think the previous suggestions were solid, can't wait to see how you implemented them.
This is gonna make me sound prudish, and I assure you that the nudity in itself doesn't bother me but....why is she naked? I just can't tell why she would be naked aside from just cause. Nudity can indeed be beautiful, but with all that is going on in your painting, it just seems like a boring solution. She has a nice blunt bang haircut, so why not something else, even draped elegant fabric behind her on her elbows? Just curious I suppose.
Post the color soon I hope:thumb:

[Shinsen]

@Ksan: Thx for the reply :D, I thought about putting some clothes on her, but then I thought it was best if I leave her naked.
I want her to look as inofensive as possible and I also want her to look pure, clothes tend to add personality to a character.

I also thought it was a nice contrast, a naked young girl in a grim environment like that. However with your reply Its tempting to put some clothes on her.
Here is pretty much the final concept, i put some hair in front of her body so its not tagged as containing nudity, but Im still thinking about clothes on her or not. more ideas anyone ??


http://i43.tinypic.com/2qn0bcm.jpg

[Shinsen]

http://shinsen.deviantart.com/art/Unholy-Game-126952381

final result! I changed the lineart quite a bit in the process, I think it gave something decent, what do you guys think?

[PapaLongLegs]

This is great! and the feedback you got seemed extremely helpful, I might ust start doing this myself. Good to see you have a DA!

[Ksan]

I think it turned out very nicely :thumb: I am glad you gave her a dress, the shimmery embroidery came out awesome. I like the mix of rendering with line work, nice style, and the colors are a sweet subtle palette. Great job!

[Shinsen]

PapaLongLegs : thanks a lot, and yes I was impressed of the DA feedback for once, it wasnt just "cool keep it up", some people actually told me what they liked and dislike.
Ksan: Thanks a lot!

[John Silva]

The owl seems out of the place and the light that surrounds the owl looks a bit awkward .

Also try to give more green light from the candle to the girl (face mostly) and a tiny bit to the owl :) it will give more "life" aspect and feeling :D

Hope to see the new results hehe