Dominance War III | veedo | Dark Eater

[veedo]

Dominance War III | veedo | Dark Eater


veedo has entered the competition!

[veedo]

holy crap... Fred has been busy XD good job man

Backstory:

Deone Cyph was an average child, growing up with an average childhood, completely unaware of his heritage and the destiny he was to fufill. His father, the only one whome he ever knew, loved him dearly, telling Deone heartfelt stories of his mother and the tragedy of her loss even before Deone's memory.

One day, while enjoying a walk in the woods near his home, Deone noticed a circle of jagged stones reaching skyward. Inexplicably drawn to the aged monument, Deone crept closer and closer, noticing strange scratches on their surface. Deone was so captivated by the stones that he failed to notice the one that caught his foot and sent him spralling on the ground, hitting his head against one of the ancient stones.

After a few hours of unconsiousness, Deone woke up in a daze and crawled to the stone that had braught him misfortune. As he wiped the lichen and dirt off the words written there Deone blanched at the sight. It was his mother's grave. Dulled by the shock of finding his mother's final resting place, Deone read on. "This is my gift to you, my son."

Deone couldn't comprehend the words, as if they were written in a foreign tongue and by someone who couldn't spell for their life. Stumbling from the grave, Deone was once again drawn, like a thousand strings tied to his body, to the circle of stones. Carefully walking around the grave, Deone crept into the circle to stand in the middle. "hmmm, gift? i don't get..." his words cut short by a lighting strike... seemingly out of a clear blue sky.

Deone, still somehow alive and concious, groped the ground in an attempt to catch his balance. The lighting had plunged him into a world of darkness, and no matter how much he strained his eyes, Deone could not see. All of a sudden, his world turned a dark blue of different shades as the hairs on the back of his neck stood straight. He knew someone was behind him and as he turned, he heard his father's voice, "I see you've enherited it, the Wings of Atra, and I must teach you now, how to use it, but it doesn't seem like you'll be much trouble." The dark blue and green figure in his vision pointed an i'll defined hand at his. Thats when Deone noticed he was holding a sword, as tall and a half as him, as light as air, crackling with sickly black sparks.

[veedo]

here is a concept for what I'm thinking for this character... His wings give him the ability to control Darkness/Void and is used as a weapon, a shield, and a method of transportation. Deone uses the wings as a weapon by making them connect to the hilt he carries as shown.

The wings wrap around him to create a wall of Dark Steel, but he cannot fly while he is using his wings as a weapon or shield (unless only one or two pieces are being used)

[ryuju]

Interesting story and concept, Honestly I think you should keep concepting different ideas, not that this one is bad but because you may come up with some even better looks. Take a look at some of the other threads and how they are trying lots of different ideas before picking one to stick with. The character is a bit generic looking and I think with some more work you could get him looking more interesting. The sword doesn't look like it would function and it doesn't look too appealing to me. That top piece looks like it would bust right off with the first swing. Take a look at swords, even elaborate ones and see how they are created and the kind of curves and edges that they have. Your going to be working on this for the next two months, I think it would be beneficial for you to let your imagination flow and throw down lots of ideas so that you are sure you are going to like what you work on for the next two months. Remember to think about functionality of equipment, armor and weapons and how that influences there look , and remember... reference, reference, reference. I'm still trying to get in the habit of getting lots of ref.

[veedo]

thanks for the comments and i totally agree, i actually went through quite a lot of crappy ideas, and the picture i drew was only "roughly" what i'm thinking of...

eg. drew another concept, made the guy more buff and trying different armour and whatnot... i think i like a stafflike weapon better, with the different wing shards making it like a halberd

i kind of like the idea of the wings being the artifact instead of the result, and my concepts are prolly going to lean that way

[Susurrus]

Your WIP image is mental! Really likle the blue death sparks coming out of his mouth. Some sort of screaming banshee type mage.

Im liking the direction your taking... seem kinda greek god type vibe.. but maybe not.

Ryuju really makes some good points. Grab some reference images and work from them.. work some more dynamic poses out. Detach the wings from the figure and just design them seperatly..

I agree artefact wings is a cool idea.


Look forward to seeing more.

[veedo]

thanks through these together as quick as i could (speed seems to help my imagination a lot XD)

just working on some different forms for the body and armour, tell my what you guys think, and maybe which one is better

[veedo]

i'm really liking the guy with the huge shoulder/chest gaurd on his left side

next i think i'll go for some "bigger" proportions, almost monkey-like, and see how that turns out

trying out some different styles with the big shoulder gaurd:

[TheMagnetic]

Veedo. You have some great elements to work with.

Body wise i dont think this guy sells as a warlord or warrior of sorts. i think you need to incorporate bulkiness into his shoulders and or ribcage. in the latest concept his hips are wider than his waste. this is a trait most common seen as feminine. would give him thinner hips and waste. also i think you should draw the knees apart from eachother. it will add to a menacing more powerful stance. proportion wise i would reference Cheeks' more "heroic" characters. cuz you have the potential to makes something so nice out of this idea!

THE SHOULDER GAURD. i think thats your sell point. i think you should design more to it. the big studs in your earlier concept were very nice. weapon wise. i think he should have something like this. even if it isnt a sword. the thickness of the blade is intimidating!!
http://www.ffcompendium.com/EspMon/irongiant10.jpg
I know you are changing your proportions and i dont know what kinda style you want but i think this guy needs some

[veedo]

yeah, i know those latest ones are a bit feminine i was referencing some greek/roman works, where the guys have a feminine waistline but are still pretty bulky and manly.

the weapon in the link is pretty cool, but i already have a weapon the wings are controlled by him (just didn't add the wings in the latest concepts to save me some time) i'm going to go with a thick staff-like holder for the wing-blades, so it'll be like a big, thick, halberd

i'll draw a quick concept to show you

[veedo]

got bored, drew this while eating breakfast lol

[Twindragon]

Im thinking off the top of my head here but with the name dark eater I feel that this character should have a helmet with a gaping maw that sucks in darkness. Right now he looks too gladiator with funky wings. Try to get away from that gladiator amour look. Also the wings need to have varying shapes. Break it up and look at birds wings and see how they flow I think this will sell the concept more.

[vikramvr]

I seriously like the story behind the character, but right now, it looks like Deon needs some more work. As twindragon said, he looks too much like a gladiator. As soon as I hear the word Dark Eater, my mind somehow goes to Sauron from lord of the rings. I like the story behind the wings though, but i have a feeling, this can be further improved a lot.

[Apollo]

im feeling the ambient dark electricity thing, im sure its going to look pretty sick once you've got this thing worked out. And keep up the work on the weapon design, you're obviously putting alot of thought into it's details and im sure, as with your character, it will be truly sick as well!

[veedo]

wow, thanks for all the comments guys, i Am actually putting a helmet on him (hence the faceless figures) just taking it one step at a time but i'll move on to that, since it seems the most important

[veedo]

decided to go with some animalistic helmets first, see if you guys like the demonic feel

tell me what you guys think i'll draw some more up, maybe ones with a more human structure

[veedo]

playing with some Lord of The Rings style helmets and attempting a Sauron style one on the right XD

the one on the left covers the face completely except the mouth and chin area. might add a bottom piece that comes up too

[Shadownami92]

When I think of dark eater I thought a nice touch might be having some sort of fang/mouth theme going, maybe if you go with a somewhat humanoid look try having a design of a demonic mouth and teethe on the chest of some armor?

[zeke3d]

if he is a dark eater, I would want to see him made out of a shadow, like the bad guys in Kingdom hearts, he is too human, maybe the darkness took overhim?

[_CAD_]

im the concept especially the weapon, and id like to see a helmet on him though im not really sure about the animal shaped ones though.